Small wank in the reviews of a Mary Sue fic!
: Batista: “This crazy new diva keeps on stalking me, man. She knows a lot of wrestlers that want her, but she still won’t leave my ass alone. Man, she’s annoying as hell- wait, what’s her name?” R&R!

Whew, what a summary, eh? Yep, it belongs to a certain Mary Sue fanfic in the Wrestling fandom...</i>


coors1977
This was really...not good.

Kimyra is completely inconsistent and self-righteous; are we supposed to idealize her? Idolize her? Cheer for her? She's not at all a sympathetic character. She jumps to conclusions but yet gets all preachy and offended when others do the same to her. You've labeled every woman in your story a 'bitch' or a 'slut' for absolutely no reason and, while I admire that you apparently take virginity seriously, because others don't doesn't make them wrong or immoral. I won't even get started on the gay comments--you're free to your opinions as I'm free to mine and I don't think either of us will change the others' minds.

Anyway, look into a thesaurus and/or dictionary as you've got quite a few made up words thrown in here. I admire that you've actually seemed to put effort into this story but it's still not enough.

Dana1
Like I've said you can't take criticism. You need to realize not everyone's going to like your stories. You can't do the: If you don't like it :P. That's not mature. If you want to be a better writer you should listen to your reviews. People saying they love it and want you to continue aren't being honest.

All the other guy wrestlers are on my side.

amy
WOW the only good thing about this story is the title. I'm going to guess the "OC" is based on you and some fantasy of yours. This story is just badly written. You seem to not care about structure. It has no direction. Your character sounds like a real ditz not to mention a annoying brat. It needs work, lots of work. I don't care if you said to not review here if we did not like it, but the way you write your only going to get bad reviews. This story just sucks it is not worth anyones time not even your so if I were you I would abadon it. Like you said Deal with it.

ginger
Oh right, so it's not that she has learning difficulties, I'm guessing ADHD and major anger management issues. Either that or you're trying to make her edgy and cool and failing miserably.

Honey, I'm gonna be honest, as you don't seem to want to listen to the people telling you to get a beta. You suck at writing. You need someone to go through your fics with a fine tooth comb and you need to listen when they tell you to change something. And I don't mean one of your friends. I mean a decent beta reader. You will continue to suck at writing until you accept some help.

maria
sorry hun but it needs lots of work. You might want to go back and really think this story through. It might help if you get someone to beta you who is older then you and has some stories already posted on this site. I wish I could be more help but if I typed everything that needs work it might take up more then one review. You really need to be more open to reviews since they are only trying to help you. The story might be able to go somewhere if you really work on it but as it is right now I don't see it working at all.



And the author... erm, what do you think a Suethor would do?!


Blazen Mint
2005-04-19
ch 2, signed Author's Note: This is to all those anonymous reviewers who were saying some dumb shit. Ok, first of all. When I say DON'T fucking review to me talking all that raspy shit, I MEANT it. Haven't I been saying that in both damn chapters? If your ugly ass can't even read that shit, don't sit there and have the damn nerve to TELL me that I can't write. I mean, how the fuck did you get through the fucking reading when you can't even understand ONE sentence? Yeah, think about that.

Well, most people that say I suck at writing, or try to insult the character in the story are anonymous cow fuckers. If yall are tryna help me, you don't give out an anonymous review you fucking bitches. Trying to seem mature, but yet it doesn't work. People like that should get sniped and bombed while they tied up. They're so fucking scared that I'm gonna email them back or IM them that they were pathetic enough to give out an anonymous review to try to insult me... who the fuck does that anymore? You're not young like ME, shut the fuck up before somebody BOMBS you.

Aight, aight. Now they were talking about the original character in my fic... the character wasn't made for your ass, she was made for my story, not bitches who don't appreciate and keeping up with their hate. This is called... Fan Fiction dot net, right? Why would you think this wouldn't be something made up? Of course people fantasize about things... it's for fans, you fucking faggots. THINK about it.

I already told the people... if you don't fucking like what I write and how I write, don't fucking read it, ass sniffers. You should of clicked BACK when you thought the story was wack with a character that you hate, bitch. What the fuck is wrong with you? Just UNDERSTAND the author's note, fuck face. I'm tired of people that doesn't make any sense. I mean, you say I suck at writing and you don't like the character... ok, WHY did you finish reading BOTH fucking chapters? Why? Did you need to know what happened? But if you didn't like it, you wouldn't read it though. NO ONE does things that they don't like, right? Unless they were forced to, but I know your mom or grannymother didn't go over your house and FORCE you to read it. I know you're old enough to decide for yourself too, since you sound like a granny yourself. I think yall are so immature.

Well,you reviewed to me as an anonymous faggot was just complete fuckness. I mean, all yall do is tryna lower my self esteem, which is not working by the way, but then be a punk about it because you don't want me to say anything back to you. I mean, why can't people just appreciate what others can do? Instead of that, yall just get mad over nothing... It's so retarded and ugly. It's no help when you review like that, fuck face.

If you think my writing's bad and I made all those mistakes, why don't your ass email me and tell me in there? Why does it gotta be anonymous so I can't talk to you? Can you make sense? What's wrong with you? Oh, and... I've been writing like that for my whole time while I was on this site. I've never got any shit like that for my other fictions, so I don't know what's really going on... People usually like the fictions I write, so what's really happening? Is it because of the character again? You started to get mad because of a made up character that acts like me, right? I mean, I didn't put any divas in there with him because I DON'T like them. What you want me to do, put a random diva in there that I don't even like? I don't write fictions about people I don't like, so yeah, shut the fuck up.

Ok, all I'm saying to dumb bitches is, if you're telling me my story needs a lot of work, use a signed review, SIGNED. I only accept friendly critisism, not flames. I mean, I give people chance to have their opinions to me, so I'll let anonymous reviews be allowed, but if you flame me, bitch, you're DYING. Oh, I didn't say I was gonna kill you, if you know how to read, ok? Thank you.

I hope you have a DANGEROUSly nice day,



I'm NOT reporting the ToS violation that constitute swearing in the reviews. This has potential to become one MAJOR catfight! XD