Okay, like a week later, I've built up the fortitude to re-read those 4 1/2 pages.

Seven. All emphasized -- either italicized, or not-italicized when they're in Eden's thoughts, which are themselves italicized. She uses the word "they" twice when not referring to another race, and I was confused because she uses it so often to refer to another race, I didn't know to whom she could be referring. But then I realized that those theys weren't italicized so they were just normal theys.

This is so bad.