I started skimming around page 19. It was that bad. I mean, I didn't even bother mentioning how the heroine compliments the hero on the whiteness of his teeth--because PoC* have really white teeth, amirite?

*does a shot*



* This came up in wank_report, so I have to address it: Turks may or may not be white, depending on what definition of white you're using and how each person self-identifies, but to Pike, they're definitely PoC, and Amesh needs to be analyzed in that light.